Nelson Mandela once said, “Education is the most powerful weapon
which you can use to change the world.” (1)
When it
comes to education, I say that this quote is one of the most truthful quotes. Education
is something that no one can ever take away from you. Once you have the
knowledge, it is yours; it is in your head. Forever.
I think that everyone needs
to have the right to get a higher education. Your future depends on
whether you have a higher education or not, because the day of today it is
really hard to find a decent, good paying job, without any degree.
Making education free would
have a lot of advantages like; everyone would be able to get a good education,
they would not have to work everyday, before and after school, to be able to
pay for their education, so they could concentrate on their schoolwork more,
and the unemployment rate would not be as high. These are just a few of the
many reasons why higher education should be free.
There is one big problem
caused by the high cost of higher education. Only 30% of all Americans, who
start college or university, graduate. This percentage is really low, and the
main reason why it is only 30% is because students work a lot to be able to pay
for the tuition. They do not have time to study for their exams, or to finish
their homework because they are working instead of studying. There are also a
lot of students that take six years or more to graduate instead of four years.
The other 70% either quit
because they cannot pay for their education anymore, or because the combination
work-school is too hard.
It is obvious that there
are a lot of people that cannot get a higher education because of a lot of
different circumstances, and I think that everyone should deserve to get a
higher education so they can get the job they want later on in their lives.
Sources:
www.goodreads.com. N.p., n.d. Web. 24 Mar. 2013.
<http://www.goodreads.com/quotes/16243-education-is-the-most-powerful-weapon-which-you-can-use>.
www.huffingtonpost.com. N.p., n.d. Web. 24 Mar. 2013.
<http://www.huffingtonpost.com/bob-samuels/why-all-public-higher-edu_b_1099437.html>.
Mandela, Nelson. www.goodreads.com. N.p.,
n.d. Web. 24 Mar. 2013.
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